Friday, 14 August 2020

Writing a myth

 The last 2 weeks my syndicate started writing individual myths about animals. The idea was to turn your idea on how something got something and turn that into a story. The idea could be as obscure as why the penguin can't fly or something else but first we had to plan. For planning we had to list down several different ideas on how the theory could happen and we had to decide on one. Then we wrote a paragraph using the 5 Ws and 1 H to explain the start of the story. That's the top bun and the patty is the middle, and the end is the bottom bun. Here's my myth:

Long, long ago when people were only first coming to Aotearoa, there lived many birds and creatures. There was a fantail and a pukeko. They both were cheeky but fantail had no tail and pukeko hated water. Now at the time some Maori were facing patupaiarehe, and fantail and pukeko were going to make a long journey to pull a huge prank. 


As they were about to leave the bush the wise elder fantail said “This isn't good, you are going to spend a week away just to pull a prank.” “Well it might be longer.” said pukeko “DO NOT G-”  but they had already left. Now in those days moa were alive and looked like dinos to fantail. It didn’t help that he came across a herd of them. Also birds like the quad-winged flesh eater lived, let me make a list of some: The bat-bird, The Zombird and the Ironbite e.g. Fantail and pukeko came across a lot more. Now at the edge of the long shoots valley or a lot of long grass they stopped.


They then wandered to the village because at the time a delicious feast should have been in the making and they would screech and scare the villagers and make them mess up the food but nothing was happening. The next couple minutes though in the background they heard lots of noises. They also didn’t know what was happening because they were distracted by a mouse. “Ahhhh! Giant mutant chickens!” said Jeffrey the mouse. 


Then they looked up and saw an albatross flying away with seven nets. Then the villagers saw them and a chase scene started as pukeko leaped over logs and ducked under roots, and the 3 day journey became a 3 hour journey. To lose them pukeko ran in a different direction but fantail was still being chased instead and the villagers started throwing things. One container splashed a lot of glue on his behind. Suddenly an ancient fan was thrown and stuck to the glue. The villagers started going back and eventually there were no more chasing fantail. 


Now pukeko fell into a swamp by accident by tripping over and knocking himself out and woke up stuck. Days passed and he started liking the water lapping at his feet, he eventually got unstuck but decided to stay. Fantail got back sad that his friend was lost and the new tail didn’t have feathers, the elder fantail cast a spell making feathers grow over the fan but he was still sad. Months later fantail got a letter from pukeko that said: Enjoying the swamp life, come over sometime! Pukeko. Fantail suddenly felt really happy and joyful inside. Nowadays fantail and pukeko visit each other and fantail has a tail, and that's why fantail has a “fan” tail.


4 comments:

  1. Kia Ora Jonathan! Wow, what a creative myth! You were extremely creative and I can tell you I laughed out loud when I read the line about Jeffrey the Mouse. Your use of varied punctuation is impressive also. I'm looking forward to seeing you in rehearsals tomorrow. Until then, stay safe and be kind :-)

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  3. Talofa Jonathan! What a creative myth you have made! Your imagination is out of my mind and I like you humor in the story as well. Your punctuation is extremely well and your sentence structure is amazing. Maybe next time you could add your thoughts on the story and how it made you feel when you were writing it down.

    Overall, fantastic job! Stay safe and Ka Pai. Blog you later!

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  4. Ka pai Jonathan! You painted a clear picture with your piece of writing. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your story. Fantail and pukeko's 'prank' turned out to be one epic adventure. Great ending too. Perhaps you could collate your favourite pieces of writing in Primary in a slide, folder or book. It would make a lovely gift to your family or to the reader. Tino pai!

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